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First Person:

First person is cool because we get right under the skin of the character, seeing and feeling what they experience, almost first-hand. Writers often say that first person gives their story "immediacy," meaning we're right there inside the protagonist. We identify with the first person POV closely. A lot, if not most young adult (YA) novels are written in the first person. Chances are your project will be too as most apprentice writers begin their careers working in first person. It's generally easier for newbie writers to understand and use.

First person has some downsides, though. It can lead to the overuse of interior monologue and exposition as, again, we're inside the protagonist's head and they are telling us about what they are going through. In other words, there is a tendency with first person to fall into the trap of telling, rather than showing. First person narratives can also suffer from "I, I, I" syndrome, where the narrative is littered with "I did this," and "I felt that," leaving the reader thinking the narrating protectonist is all about "me, me, me." You know that friend of yours who only posts selfies? Yeah, that. As the link below points out, the trick here is to get rid of the overuse of "I" through word choice, and to focus on what's happening outside the protagonist's head. But, of course, getting the protagonist's thoughts first-hand is one of the appeals of the first person POV.

Here's an example of first person POV from the opening of my middle school novel Iggy's World:

Testing, testing. One, two, three. Is the mic on my phone working? Check, check. I'll have to keep my voice down. My dad's filming a show right now. I'm recording this podcast just off the set.
     Here we go! Welcome to Iggy's World.
     Hi! I'm your host, Iggy Zambini, and you're listening to episode one of Iggy's World, a podcast about insects. I know, I know. Insects make your skin crawl. But don't tune out yet. This podcast isn't just about bugs. For example, today I'm recording this from the set of the sci-fi web series Great Big Bugs in Space. Because, you know, the show is about great big bugs in space.

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-- Christine Fischer Guy author of The Umbrella Mender (2014) and The Instrument Must Not Matter (2026).

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Tara Gereaux

"Gail is an incredible editor. She has an innate ability to understand what I’m trying to do with my writing and to help me see what I need to do to get where I want. The best part about working with her is her supportive, encouraging approach. She’s a writer, she gets it – she knows how hard writing can be – but when I’m working with Gail, it always feels a little bit easier and a little more fun. Can’t recommend her highly enough."

-- Tara Gereaux has published two books of fiction and was the recipient of the Colleen Bailey Memorial Award from the Saskatchewan Foundation for the Arts, and a REVEAL Indigenous Art Award from the Hnatyshyn Foundation.

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Matthew Hooton

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-- Dr. Matthew Hooton, author of Deloume Road, Typhoon Kingdom, and Everything Lost, Everything Found, longlisted for the ARA Historical Novel Prize 2025. Dr. Hooton is a lecturer at the University of Adelaide.

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-- Jessica Waite, author of the Widow's Guide to Dead Bastards,  one of The Globe and Mail's best 100 books of 2024.

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-- Darcy Friesen Hossack, Danuta Gleed runner-up and Commonwealth Prize-shortlisted author of Mennonites Don't Dance  and Stillwater.

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Kelly S. Thompson

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-- Kelly S. Thompson, national bestselling author of Girls Need Not Apply: Field Notes from the Forces.

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-- Lise Mayne, author of Time Enough.

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Elle Wild

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-- Elle Wild. #1 bestselling author of Strange Things Done and winner of the Arthur Ellis Award for Best Unpublished First Crime Novel.

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-- Maia Caron, author of Song of Batoche

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-- Daniel Griffin is the author of Stopping for Strangers and Two Roads Home.

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-- Leila Marshy, author of The Philistine.

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-- Nerys Parry, author of Man & Other Natural Disasters, a finalist for the Colophon Prize and tied for seventh in the Giller Prize Reader’s Choice Awards.

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Jennifer Manuel

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-- Jennifer Manuel, author of The Heaviness of Things That Float

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-- Emily De Angelis, author of The Stones of Burren Bay.

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-- Maggi Feehan, author of The Serpent's Veil

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-- Kimmy Beach, author of The Last Temptation of Bond.

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-- Chris Tarry, four-time Juno Award winner and author of How to Carry a Bigfoot Home.

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